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从外网扒了两篇Examples of Successful Statements，你们感受下。

Statement #1

My interest in science dates back to my years in high school, where I excelled in physics, chemistry, and math. When I was a senior, I took a first-year calculus course at a local college (such anadvanced-level class was not available in high school) and earned an A. It seemed only logical that I pursue a career in electrical engineering.

When I began my undergraduate career, I had the opportunity to be exposed to the full range of engineering courses, all of which tended to reinforce and solidify my intense interest in engineering. I’vealso had the opportunity to study a number of subjects in the humanities andthey have been both enjoyable and enlightening, providing me with a new anddifferent perspective on the world in which we live.

In the realm of engineering, I have developed a special interest in the field of laser technology and have evenbeen taking a graduate course in quantum electronics. Among the 25 or sostudents in the course, I am the sole undergraduate. Another particular interest of mine is electromagnetics, and last summer, when I was a technical assistant at a world-famous local lab, I learned about its many practical applications, especially in relation to microstrip and antenna design.Management at this lab was sufficiently impressed with my work to ask that Ireturn when I graduate. Of course, my plans following completion of my current studies are to move directly into graduate work toward my master’s in science.After I earn my master’s degree, I intend to start work on my Ph.D. inelectrical engineering. Later I would like to work in the area of research anddevelopment for private industry. It is in R & D that I believe I can makethe greatest contribution, utilizing my theoretical background and creativityas a scientist.

I am highly aware of the superb reputation of your school, and my conversations with several of your alumni have served to deepen my interest in attending. I know that, in addition to your excellent faculty, your computer facilities are among the best in the state. I hope you will give me the privilege of continuing my studies at your fine institution.

全文一共四段，一共368个字第一段讲我会选择电气工程的简单粗暴的逻辑关系，一个是因为兴趣，一个是因为擅长。第二段写兴趣和实力的加深，其实一步一步都是在讲，我为什么会选择这个领域这个项目。第三段指出了自己想要研究的方向，以及为此，我现在所作出的努力，学业和职业规划。最后一段，为什么我会选择你们学校和你们的项目。一环扣一环，条理清晰，表达顺畅，将自己的故事用最朴实的文字写出来，有自夸，但恰到好处，不矫情，也没煽情。

Statement #2

Having majored in literary studies (world literature) as an undergraduate, I would now like to concentrate on English andAmerican literature.

I am especially interested in nineteenth-century literature, women’s literature, Anglo-Saxon poetry, and folk lore and folk literature. My personal literary projects have involved some combination of these subjects. For the oral section of my comprehensive exams,I specialized in nineteenth century novels by and about women. The relationship between “high” and folk literature became the subject for my honors essay, which examined Toni Morrison’s use of classical, biblical, African, andAfro-American folk tradition in her novel. I plan to work further on this essay, treating Morrison’s other novels and perhaps preparing a paper suitable for publication.

In my studies toward a doctoral degree, I hope to examine more closely the relationship between high and folk literature.My junior year and private studies of Anglo-Saxon language and literature havecaused me to consider the question of where the divisions between folklore,folk literature, and high literature lie. Should I attend your school, I wouldlike to resume my studies of Anglo-Saxon poetry, with special attention to itsfolk elements.

Writing poetry also figures prominently in my academic and professional goals. I have just begun submitting to the smaller journals with some success and am gradually building a working manuscript for acollection. The dominant theme of this collection relies on poems that draw from classical, biblical, and folk traditions, as well as everyday experience,in order to celebrate the process of giving and taking life, whether literal or figurative. My poetry draws from and influences my academic studies. Much of what I read and study finds a place in my creative work as subject. At the sametime, I study the art of literature by taking part in the creative process,experimenting with the tools used by other authors in the past.

In terms of a career, I see myself teaching literature, writing criticism, and going into editing or publishing poetry.Doctoral studies would be valuable to me in several ways. First, your teachingassistant ship program would provide me with the practical teaching experienceI am eager to acquire. Further, earning a Ph.D. in English and Americanliterature would advance my other two career goals by adding to my skills, bothcritical and creative, in working with language. Ultimately, however, I see the Ph.D. as an end in itself, as well as a professional stepping stone; I enjoy studying literature for its own sake and would like to continue my studies on the level demanded by the Ph.D. program.

全文5段，429个字，也是没超过500第一段相对更为简单粗暴，我就是想申请英语语言和美国文化。第二段为什么想申请这个专业，因为我感兴趣，然后用具体的实例阐述清楚自己感兴趣的点。第三段明确想要研究的方向。第四段讲为什么会选择这个研究方向，和我学业职业规划的关联，以及我现在正在做的。第五段讲职业规划及为什么要申请这个博士项目。也是句句都在点子上，围绕着‘为什么我会选择这个项目’，没写半句废话。