There were obstacles leading up to the trip to the US for the contest. Because I had to miss two weeks of class, my school was reluctant to approve my leave of absence. I had to talk to my class teacher and my school principal and promise them I would not allow myself to fall behind in my studies. Finally, they yielded. Before the contest, all the Chinese contestants gathered in Shanghai first. Unexpectedly, our teacher, the team leader for Beijing, failed to get his visa. I found myself having to shoulder responsibility for all five of the Beijing contestants. I was surprised that my fellow teammates thought I was more mature and therefore more suited for the leadership position anyway.

New problems emerged when I checked my robot in Shanghai. All the battery had been used up due to a loose power switch. I decided to buy a new battery from a robot company in Shanghai, and had to disassemble and reassemble the robot completely because the battery was tied to the motherboard. The new battery brought a much higher voltage (电压) to the robot, so that its speed was almost 1.5 times faster. During the trial test, my previous mistake showed up again: fast speed led the robot to slip into the walls or turn the wrong way. I had no choice but to change the former programming, so that Huo Huo could successfully adjust to the higher speed. In spite of so many unforeseen difficulties, I competed in the contest and came third out of 80 plus high school contestants from around the world and was the highest of the students representing China.

评析：这两段主要叙述“我”参加国际级竞赛的经历，同时突出了“我”除了拥有丰富的专业知识之外，还有另外两个闪光点：领导能力和处理突发问题的能力。

During the whole process of the contest, I received support and encouragement from my friends, teachers, and my parents through emails and long distance calls. The day before my contest, my parents called and took turns to chat with me. They talked about things in a light-hearted manner, but avoided to mention the big event coming up the next day. I knew they wanted to divert my attention and put my nerves at ease. They were ever so skillful in the way they motivated and encouraged me to go all out and give my very best.

评析：本段进行了“闪回”，开头(During the whole process of the contest)明确提示读者“我”要采用倒叙的方法，回顾一下参赛时发生的事情。

I know wherever I am I can always count on my parents’ support. It is my turn and desire to make them proud.

评析：开头段写父母为“我”的成功创造条件，结尾段再提父母，不仅和开头段呼应，而且立意比开头段更深，是一个感人的结尾。

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